I’m working on a writing question and need an explanation to help me learn.
Overall, there is a lack of link to experts and the essay needs to expand more on idols of the cave with each body paragraph in mind. Reasoning and explanations on how the evidence supports the idea can also be improved upon as currently there are too many claims for the readers to process. There is no mention of how other aspects of idols of the cave, such as education level, affected people’s perception of the pandemic, so the author can keep this in mind when developing the essay further. The essay also lacks an explanation on Bacon’s other idols. How do we know that idols of the cave is the most relevant to this issue as compared to the other idols as mentioned in the prompt? As a whole, the essay has some typos and grammatical errors, so it needs further editing and proofreading before submission.